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hello everyone,we're doing a fan project which started on vp but has now been abandoned,which means it's open to
suggestions and tweakings,even more legendaries

I was wondering,if any of you would like to join us.
The pokegods have chosen you,choose what do with that power will you be good,evil nuetral,it's up to you


all are welcome,keep in mind some of us are new at writing so we would also like input
here's what we have so far
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1LgU ... fcR7M/edit
hope to see you and read your stories,laters^^

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okay seriously what the hells with all the dark types....sadly it's all true.


Everyone wears a mask to hide there true selves , but I can see right through them.


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Wed Jul 31, 2013 4:46 am
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As per request, a personal feedback of the story The path Linky
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Putting grammar and syntax aside:
I suppose the main thing I want to say is try to tell why the characters [in this case the narrator] act the way they do. I mean, that makes things easier to understand as a reader and follow the story better. Like, the narrator has a very strong opinion about the world and the people. Why is that, it's not like they were born with that thought. Did they see people beating up weaker people? Do they cheat or something? I mean, there's millions of people in the world with their own reasons for their actions and thoughts, and character development can make a fiction writing so damn interesting! This is especially true when the whole story is focused on one character, you see.

I quite liked the interaction in the dream though, the way the narrator explored the boulders. Also what Darkrai said to the narrator was cool too.

Kinda sad it was short though, this could've turned out very interesting.

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Fri Aug 09, 2013 6:15 pm
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Sorry for the double post, I wanted to bump this thread to notify that I've posted... "orz

My contribution, tell me if anyone has trouble opening the gdocs.


Wed Oct 16, 2013 2:10 am
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GenepeOrgel wrote:
Sorry for the double post, I wanted to bump this thread to notify that I've posted... "orz

My contribution, tell me if anyone has trouble opening the gdocs.


nicely done.
the set up was very nice and I like how you describe things.

I'm not used to reading that much online but it was worth it

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